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writing structure

leads:
1. how why and what leads
2. it is the most relevant information to the story

direct quotes:
3. quotes that directly match up with the paragraph before them
4. elaborates on the previous paragraph
5. can be longer than one sentence, should have attribution after the first sentence of the quote, and noun then verb. ex: senior Bob Ramirez said
6. identifies the source of the quote
7. noun then verb

transitions:
8. links the paragraphs together
9. fact, indirect quote or partial quote

conclusion:
10. are the most important and recent facts first? is the story accurate? are the sources identified fully? are the paragraphs short? is the sentence structure varied in the story? is the story neat and double-spaced so that it is easy to read? does your story flow? Did you use the transition/ quote formula? did you use active voice?
11.editorializing, using first and second person, messy handwriting, poor grammar and spelling, paragraphs too long, misspelling names in the story, and trying to use all of the information


The school has reported 22 fights so far in the 2010-2011 school year.
“One of my friends got in a fight, but he didn’t start it. He was defending himself,” freshman Andy Opel said.
 In response to the escalating fights, the school district hired the Teen Conflict Resolution Team to help students solve disagreements through non-violent solutions.
"Students have to learn how to solve life’s problems without violence, and this program will teach our students just that,” teacher Mr. Brown said.
After March 23, any student caught fighting on campus must complete a TCRT non-violence workshop, in addition to normal disciplinary actions.
"Now students will get suspended and be forced to attend this program,” Opel said. “That’s just too much.”

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